compose you haikus and post ................................(5-7-5)


AS I DRINK AND SIT  (5)
DIF'RENT CHARACTERS I MET  (7)
IN BA-GUIOPHO-RIA  (5)


by octagon.........

nakakatuwa
hahahahahahaha
para me sira

in a warm dark night
and a cold bottle of beer
keeps me in a chill

constant rains—
I read your haiku
differently

feeling of bliss i
lost when this malady of
love overtook me.

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Just sharing this info:

Critical readers of haiku generalize that Haikus must at least have a context of stillness and motion. It usually starts with an image of stillness then, using a pivot word, the image of motion is added. In some styles, the pivot word could be placed either at the beginning or ending of the haiku to achieve a literary effect.

The following examples come from the three great masters of the haiku: Basho, Buson and Issa. Due to the differences between Japanese and English, the translations do not conform to the 17-syllable, 7-5-7 pattern that the poems were originally written in.

Example: #1
Here is a famous poem by Basho.

old pond...
a frog leaps
in water's  sound


Notice how the pivot word "in" could be interpreted in two ways.
Does the frog leap in the water or the water's sound?

Example: #2

Here is an example from Buson. He lived from 1716-83 and was an accomplished painter as well as a poet. He is sometimes considered more worldly than Basho.

the old man
cutting barley -
bent like a sickle

(the pivot word is "bent")

Example: #3

Here is a poem from Issa, who lived from 1763-1827. His name means "single bubble in sleeping tea" and he is known as a humanist who loved all creatures, including the crawly kind. He also had a sense of humor that comes through in some of his poems.

Don't worry, spiders,
I keep house
casually.

(pivot word is "casually")

wow....nice.

i guess we should all send to you our compositions for editing, huh. hehe.